svn commit: r1622842 - /ofbiz/site/index.html

[jacopoc]

Author: jacopoc
Date: Sat Sep  6 10:56:07 2014
New Revision: 1622842

URL: http://svn.apache.org/r1622842
Log:
Improved the introduction of OFBiz; thanks to Ron Wheeler for the initial review and others for their feedback and contributions (Adrian Crum, Pierre Smits, Jacques Le Roux, Gavin Mabie).

Modified:
    ofbiz/site/index.html

Modified: ofbiz/site/index.html
URL: http://svn.apache.org/viewvc/ofbiz/site/index.html?rev=1622842&r1=1622841&r2=1622842&view=diff
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--- ofbiz/site/index.html (original)
+++ ofbiz/site/index.html Sat Sep  6 10:56:07 2014
@@ -147,21 +147,25 @@
           </ul>
         </div>
 
-        <p>Apache OFBiz (The Apache Open For Business Project) is an open source enterprise
-        automation software project licensed under the Apache License Version 2.0. By open source enterprise automation we mean:
-        Open Source ERP (Enterprise Resource Planning), Open Source CRM (Customer RelationShip Management), Open Source E-Business / E-Commerce, Open Source SCM (Supply Chain Management), Open Source MRP (Manufacturing Resources Planning),
-        Open Source CMMS/EAM (Maintenance Management System/Enterprise Asset Management), Open Source POS (Point Of Sale), and so on.</p>
-
-        <p>Apache OFBiz is a foundation and starting point for reliable, secure and
-        scalable enterprise solutions. Use it out-of-the-box (OOTB) or customize
-        to suit even your most challenging business needs. With OFBiz in place,
-        you can get started right away and then grow your operations as your
-        business grows, without the huge deployment and maintenance costs of
-        traditional enterprise automation systems.
-
-        </p>
-        <p>Apache OFBiz is a project of <a href="http://www.apache.org/">The Apache Software Foundation</a>.</p>
-
+        <p>Apache OFBiz&trade; is an open source product for the automation of enterprise
+           processes that includes framework components and business applications for
+           ERP (Enterprise Resource Planning),
+           CRM (Customer Relationship Management),
+           E-Business / E-Commerce, SCM (Supply Chain Management),
+           MRP (Manufacturing Resources Planning),
+           MMS/EAM (Maintenance Management System/Enterprise Asset Management),
+           POS (Point Of Sale) and so on.</p>
+          
+        <p>Apache OFBiz provides a foundation and starting point for reliable, secure and
+           scalable enterprise solutions. Use it out-of-the-box, customize it or use it as
+           a framework to implement your most challenging business needs. With OFBiz, you
+           can get started right away without the huge deployment and maintenance costs of
+           traditional enterprise automation systems. As your business grows, you can
+           extend the functionality to meet your more sophisticated needs.</p>
+          
+        <p>Apache OFBiz is licensed under the <a href="http://www.apache.org/licenses/" target="_blank">Apache License Version 2.0</a>.</p>
+        <p>The Apache OFBiz project is part of <a href="http://www.apache.org/" target="_blank">The Apache Software Foundation</a>.</p>
+<!--
         <p>Being open source under the Apache 2.0 license and driven by a community Apache OFBiz offers both flexibility by design and by access to code, and a solution where you're not alone but rather can work with many others to get things done.
         It's hard to say who and how many organizations are using Apache OFBiz because they don't have to tell us when they use it.
         In the <a href="documentation.html">documentation</a> page you'll find link to a Wiki page with the list of known sites and products based on OFBiz we know about (&quot;Users of Apache OFBiz&quot;).</p>
@@ -172,7 +176,7 @@
             <li><a href="apache-ofbiz-project-overview.html">Documentation - Project Overview</a></li>
             <li><a href="apache-ofbiz-getting-started.html">Documentation - Getting Started</a></li>
         </ul>
-        
+-->        
         <div>
           <h3>News</h3>
           <p class="postmeta">